4.0 out of 5 stars:A small-town wannabe journalist, 'bites off' more than she can chew in the Big Apple!
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My ReaderVerified review is 88%. Written in Vampire's Blood by Matthew and James Dale is a thrilling, fast-paced murder mystery set in New York City. It's not that far into the book that you realize the serial killer is a vampire, and the lead detective, Lt. Drakon, is wise to their ways. And Joy, a small-town wannabe journalist, bites off more than she can chew in the Big Apple!
I loved the fluid storytelling and all the scary twists and turns throughout the book, but this novel suffered a bit from grammatical errors. I would have given it a much higher score, but the typos and sentence structure were sometimes distracting. I suggest the authors find a good line editor and resubmit their novel after all the corrections have been made.
You can really feel the enthusiasm the authors have for the genre and the joy they experienced writing their story. I highly recommend this book to all Vampire enthusiasts and lovers of crime dramas. It's a heart stopper!
Thanks, John.
I pray all is well with you and your family.
I appreciate your honesty. I’ve taken your critique to heart and will hire a line editor.
Thanks, John,
I pray all is well with you and your family.
I appreciate your honesty. I’ve taken your critique to heart and will hire a line editor.
Hey James, this is where we can discuss your book. I really think your book could be vastly improved if you hired a line editor on Fiverr or Upwork. I used a lady from Eurore who was not that expensive, and she helped me with grammar and plot development. It's nice to have a second set of eyes look over your work. Sometimes you don't realize you said the same thing several times or that you left out a key fact. But, overall, I think you are a very talented and engaging storyteller. Congrats, John